Saturday, April 30, 2011

Short Story Draft

She is Atzhiri Velazquez. Age at the moment: 8 Year: 2004. Her home in Logan Square was amazing. From the park and school to the lady who lived across from the park who bathed her kids on the corner. Her old neighborhood has seen her through her childhood and my pre-adolescence. The school, Frederick Funston Elementary was the most amazing home school ever! It held her best friends, the teachers that favored her (she was considered a little genius) and her neighbor who got in a fight with her once over something unnecessarily trivial.

We are looking at her now, Atzhiri is coming out of her "house", her parents have never owned a house, instead they lived in basement after rented basement. Even though they moved a lot Atzhiri never worried because they always stayed within her neighborhood boundaries, within the streets she knew so well. She has exited her door, her mother had just done her hair in a pony tail for school, it is a Wednesday. Even though she came out of the door she was still within the gates. Atzhiri is waiting for Erica, her friend from last year. Erica lived at the end of her block and she came to pick her up every morning at 7:48 and they would both walk together to school, which was only two blocks away.

Both girls were no longer in the same classroom, but they still talked, nothing about really. They mostly just walked. Laughed about the funny leaves or the lady who lived int he corner. As soon as they get inside the school both girls go their own way. And they do not see each other at all, even though their classrooms are across from each other.

We see Atzhiri going into Mr. Vargas' 4th grade class. Full of joy and laughter, she sits at her seat. The day goes by as any other day. Manny makes fun of her weirdly NATURALLY highlighted hair, Edwin asks her about her friend Maria, and Claribel is with her all the time, (besties)

It is the end of the school day now, with little homework Atzhiri exits the crowded school with her pink Hilary Duff book bag. She looks for her mom, finds her and they walk home together....

Wednesday, April 20, 2011

Song/Poem Analyzed

The poem i chose to analyze is the song Dear God 2.0 by The Roots (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=32Qr5oKKP-M). i think that the rap was talking about the problems in the world and problems telling God about them. First line says "Dear God, I'm trying hard to reach you" i saw this as the narrator trying to tell God about everything that is going on (as if He does not know, or will not acknowledge or help the situation) but without any luck.

In the second stanza, it reads "they said he's busy hold the line please, call me crazy, i thought maybe he could mind read". This proves my hypothesis that God is not listening, he's busy? Then the narrator says i thought maybe he could mind read. I took at as the narrator saying, God should be able to mind read, or at least that's what the narrator thought, but apparently not. People say when they are down "if God knows what is going wrong, why won't he help?" Well we cannot answer that question, but that is pretty much what the speaker in the poem is saying.

Then the song goes on talking about what is wrong with the world. "Acid rain, earthquakes, hurricanes, tsunamis". "Terrorist, crime sprees, assaults, and robberies". It seems the speaker has been thinking about all of this for a really long time, then says "we'll I've been thinkin' about and I've been breakin' it down without an answer" Without an answer. It is not easy to find out why bad stuff happens to us when we cannot contact "our maker".

Later in the song the speaker goes on to talk about himself asking God for forgiveness for not doing what he was supposed to. The next line is one of my favorites and one which i will elaborate on "Why is the world ugly when you made it in your image?" If God made the world, why is it so f***ed up? Because humans messed it up, maybe, but why does not God help us fix it? He is "our maker", right? Maybe. One can also say we made Him, just as we humans made buildings and computers. Humans also wrote the bible.
The original song is called Dear God by XTC (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nlJwO664WLI) and it pretty much says that God is messed up because he won't help us, and that we made him up. The speaker in that song says he chooses not to believe in God or the Devil.

However in Dear God 2.0 the speaker wants help and forgiveness, but still believes in God.